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This is a little sort of ad I've been rewriting in my head over and over. I thought I would post it and get some feed back so that I can make it better. I know my grammar sucks but what I really want is to know if you guys agree with what I am saying and if I could say it better.

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Responsibility. Its horrible concept. It means having to do something even if you don't like it. It results in frustration and anger at times. It can even scare us. In fact taking the responsibility for someone other then ourselves can be incredibly daunting. It is certainly no wonder that when we are offered the chance to work to bettering someone else's life we'd shy away from it. Its not that we don't want to make life better for someone else, its that idea of committing to the responsibility that irks us. "What happens if I can't do anything, what if I forget to do something?, what if I just don't want to do it due to circumstance". Its scary.

This is why I think The Karma Project is such a great idea. By using the internet to communicate and gather people to work together to help each other. Imagine, with a community lead properly, just the minimal effort from each person amazing things could be done. Think of how this has already happened! We already see the works of online communities in Linux, Wikipedia and other open source projects. A large internet based community can do amazing things if the pathways are in place.

With The Karma Project, there is no responsibility or commitment to do anything. The true goal is to create a large community of people helping people. All we need is the word to be passed on. Join up and/or tell people. Thats all we ask.
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How ya like that? :wow:

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Sat May 24, 2008 5:50 am
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:wow: :up:

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Sat May 24, 2008 11:11 pm
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It's really good. My only problem is that I notice a lot of little grammatical things that I get a bit OCD with. :shy:


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Yeah point them out. My grammar sucks.

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NiemandWeiss wrote:
Yeah point them out. My grammar sucks.

Ha yeah.. i didn't even notice them.

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Sun May 25, 2008 9:47 pm
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I only noticed the lack of apostrophes in some "it's".

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Responsibility. It's a horrible concept. It means having to do something, even if you don't like it. At times, it results in anger and frustration. It can even scare us to the very fiber of our being. In fact, taking the responsibility for someone other than ourselves can be incredibly daunting. It is certainly no wonder that when we are offered the chance to work to better someone else's life, we'd shy away from it. It's not that we don't want to make life better for someone else, it's the idea of committing to the responsibility that irks us. "What happens if I can't do anything, what if I forget to do something?, what if I just don't want to do it due to circumstance". It's scary.

This is why I think The Karma Project is such a great idea. By using the internet to communicate and gather people to work together to help each other, we gain support for our cause. Imagine, with a community lead properly, just the minimal effort from each person could lead to amazing things. Think of how this has already happened! We already see the works of online communities in Linux, Wikipedia and other open source projects. A large internet based community can do amazing things if the pathways are in place.

With The Karma Project, there is no responsibility or commitment to do anything. The true goal is to create a large community of people helping people. All we need is the word to be passed on. Join up and/or tell people. Thats all we ask.


I fixed all the little errors I noticed, fixed some sentence structure, and I edited some sentences to attempt to make it more fluid. Thoughts?

And yes, I'm a massive English nerd. :shy:


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